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User talk:KaedeKit
You can make a sub-page to work on this, as talk pages are for users on the wiki to contact each other. To make a sub-page, just make a page called User:KaedeKit/putanamehere (i.e. User:Aramet/Tables). ---Aramet 03:35, 12 July 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks, I'll do that. KaedeKit 19:05, 12 July 2009 (UTC)
Links on Userpage
It seems like you're using External links for no reason on your userpage. o-o You can make it easier by just typing [[PageName]]. Thought I'd share this tidbit.
Example: You currently have [1] This could become User:KaedeKit/Pronounce --~Zallist 03:51, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
- Oops, I forgot about that. ~ KaedeKit 03:53, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
- Yay it's fixed. :D --~Zallist 03:55, 27 July 2009 (UTC)
Preview Button
Please use the preview button to see how changes will look rather than making a lot of individual changes, it clogs up the recent changes log which a lot of people use to keep tabs on the wiki.--Mystickskye 01:34, 9 August 2009 (UTC)
Links
You don't have to modify the dead links, we're going to make them into redirects. ---Angevon 03:15, 18 August 2009 (UTC)
Monster Templates
Please read this and this and use those correct values and formats on the monster templates you create. Thanks. --Aramet (Talk) 00:11, 20 August 2009 (UTC)
- Thanks for reminding me, I seem to be forgetting to bullet the lists, etc. --KaedeKit 00:16, 20 August 2009 (UTC)
Small note
Regarding the Korean on your page, 에픽 페일 is probably preferable to 에픽 파일. 파일 comes out more like pile whereas comes out more like pail.--Mystickskye 02:01, 22 August 2009 (UTC)
- Alright. --KaedeKit 02:03, 22 August 2009 (UTC)
Highschool?
Maybe we go to the same school? :P Which district are you in, SUSD/PVUSD?
--[[User:Tommie|Tommie] August 24th 6:20
Please read this
Please go to this area and reply to the vote. - Random
Angelic Herb
Have you checked the in-game spelling? As far as I know I used the correct in-game spelling of its name, which is Angellic. I know this is not the actual correct way to spell it but as far as the names the wiki uses for items is concerned, we usually use the in-game spelling to stop any confusion. --ZRoc (Talk) 05:25, 4 September 2009 (UTC)
- Oh, I just thought it was a misspelling. Sorry. --KaedeKit 23:21, 4 September 2009 (UTC)
Pronounciation
I'd like to point out one thing for your Pronounciation page. Cichol means single legged. Also, it has more than pronounciations. Maybe you should rename it. Hope that helped. ^ ^ - A Random User 23:51, 4 September 2009 (UTC)
- Really? All the meanings I've been able to find for it say that it means "withered foot" or "footless". But I really have no idea. --KaedeKit 23:52, 4 September 2009 (UTC)
- Thats becuase, acording to Celtic legends; Fomors were: one legged, one eyed, large brained creatures. Or so I think. But for sure, it is single legged. - A Random User 23:55, 4 September 2009 (UTC)
- Some of them were, not all. My Celtic mythology books say nothing about him, so I'm sort of reluctant to put it there. --KaedeKit 23:58, 4 September 2009 (UTC)
- It was his epithet Gricenchos which meant footless, or whithered foot. I was doing some looking around, and apparently Cichol derives from cicul, which means "astronomical cycle" --Sephy 06:09, 18 June 2010 (UTC)
- Some of them were, not all. My Celtic mythology books say nothing about him, so I'm sort of reluctant to put it there. --KaedeKit 23:58, 4 September 2009 (UTC)
- Thats becuase, acording to Celtic legends; Fomors were: one legged, one eyed, large brained creatures. Or so I think. But for sure, it is single legged. - A Random User 23:55, 4 September 2009 (UTC)
I really like the definitions you listen. Who wouldve thought Tara Rath Caslte ment a Hill's Castle of Prosperity. By the way, should you rename the page? becuase you listed pronounciation, variables, and definitions. - A Random User 00:13, 9 September 2009 (UTC) P.S.: I added Ouroboros to your list. I don't know the Gaelic pronounciation for it due to the fact that it is Greek.
- Yeah, I thought it was pretty fitting. devCAT seems to do a bit of research on names. I dunno about renaming the page, since I only added the meanings recently. --ΚλεδεΚιτ 00:20, 9 September 2009 (UTC)
- Should I list my scource somwere? Also, I tryed looking for Karpfen and found a germanic town, but I'm not entirly sure what it means. By the way, I like your signature. - A Random User 01:02, 9 September 2009 (UTC)
Ouroboros
Lets jsut leaveit at ouroboros for now. - A Random User 23:40, 6 September 2009 (UTC)
- Okay. I'll redirect once I know for sure what it is. --KaedeKit 23:42, 6 September 2009 (UTC)
- Agreed. I just redirected it for now becuase there is about a 60% chance of it being the thing on the wikipedia. Besides, alot of monster's names have changed from server to server. - A Random User 23:45, 6 September 2009 (UTC)
Items
Please use the following templates:
- Template:Item/Robe
- Template:Item/Shield
- Template:Item/Suit
- Template:Item/Suit Unisex
- Template:Item/Shoe
- Template:Item/Hat
- Template:Item/Glove
- Template:Item/Header
- Template:Item
- A Random User 01:08, 7 September 2009 (UTC)
- By the way, use Header with every template except Item without a /. - A Random User 01:11, 7 September 2009 (UTC)
- One more thing, if you reformat a page, and there is already a pictue of that item equiped on the page, please reformat that too so it shows up. Even without item templates. - A Random User 04:21, 8 September 2009 (UTC)
- I've been trying to do that, but every once in a while one shows up that I have no idea what to do with. --ΚλεδεΚιτ 23:20, 8 September 2009 (UTC)
- Just note one thing, unused images go here. - A Random User 23:24, 8 September 2009 (UTC)
- We are still debating the usefulness of Random's templates. Continue to make the tables the normal way, just as you are doing please. ---Angevon 03:32, 9 September 2009 (UTC)
- This isn't about that, its about images such as (Item) Equiped.png being replaced with the broken link of (Item) Equiped Front.png. - A Random User 04:07, 10 September 2009 (UTC)
- We are still debating the usefulness of Random's templates. Continue to make the tables the normal way, just as you are doing please. ---Angevon 03:32, 9 September 2009 (UTC)
- Just note one thing, unused images go here. - A Random User 23:24, 8 September 2009 (UTC)
- I've been trying to do that, but every once in a while one shows up that I have no idea what to do with. --ΚλεδεΚιτ 23:20, 8 September 2009 (UTC)
- One more thing, if you reformat a page, and there is already a pictue of that item equiped on the page, please reformat that too so it shows up. Even without item templates. - A Random User 04:21, 8 September 2009 (UTC)
Uhh...
This is kind of random but who are you logged on as right now? - A Random User 21:00, 12 September 2009 (UTC)
- Can you logg on as someone and tell me who? - A Random User 21:02, 12 September 2009 (UTC)
- I'll explain later, tell me who you logg on as. - A Random User 21:04, 12 September 2009 (UTC)
- Can you logg on as someone and tell me who? - A Random User 21:02, 12 September 2009 (UTC)
Re: NPC
Yes but I have to manualy make htem trnsparent. Despight if they'r transparent there. - A Random User 19:31, 19 September 2009 (UTC)
No, they're not, that only happens if you convert them into JPG. The only hard part is acquiring the KR test .pack which is huge.--Hengsheng120(talk•contribs) 20:44, 19 September 2009 (UTC)
- That must be why! I only have the NA .pack. --KaedeKit 21:24, 19 September 2009 (UTC)
- That's not what I meant, any client will do, all the DDS files (in any client) are already transparent. The KR test part is for like future NPCs and items. Though KR normal should suffice already.--Hengsheng120(talk•contribs) 22:28, 19 September 2009 (UTC)
Cor NPC Images
I appreciate for you helping but it through off my rhythem and I didn't realise why I got off track until I looked at the RC. Still, thank you for helping, but I got it. However im going to stop at Tara for now and work on taillteann and up tomorrow. So you can work on those for now. Let me know which you upload though. - A Random User 03:59, 6 October 2009 (UTC)
- Ah, I'm sorry. I didn't realize it. --KaedeKit 23:21, 6 October 2009 (UTC)
Re:NPC Images
Er.. Well, the thing is, there's a .jpg AND .png of the npc images. And then both images are being used, the .png ones on the npc page, and the .jpg ones on whatever list they might be on (the town/area they're in & the NPCs list thing). And the .png ones are so much larger, in size, so I don't see a point in the .png one, because I find it fine to have a white bg (the .jpg pictures). Like... I dunno. I just don't see a point in there being 2 of the same thing....almost.--♪♫♪♫тιиα♪♫♪♫ταιқ♪♫♪ 00:44, 29 October 2009 (UTC)
- Yea. Plus, the transparent images are already in a white box thing, while on the list, its a light blue (white on light blue really doesn't look that bad). Meaning: if the .jpg images (the one with the white backgrounds, cuz .jpg is too stupid to know how to handle transparencies) were in the place of the .png ones, and the .png ones were in the palce of the .jpg ones, it'd make more sense. Cept, it might be just me, but seemingly-light-blue backgrounds on pictures, because of the color of the boxes on the list, and the transparencies, don't look too great. Apologies if everything I just said made no sense, moral of the story: annihilate the .png images from the NPC pages, cuz there's no point in them being there. Maybe they could find a better home on the list, but on the pages, its pointless.--♪♫♪♫тιиα♪♫♪♫ταιқ♪♫♪ 00:58, 29 October 2009 (UTC)
- I thought Jαy was someone I hadn't seen on the wiki before lol Thank you for that info and example. I don't know much about image formats but assume what you said about compression applies to gif images and why they look so bad. I have changed to saving images as png (the very basic program I use was set to save images as gif by default). --ZRoc (Talk) 02:29, 31 October 2009 (UTC)
Regarding the edit on my page
LOL I DIDN'T EVEN NOTICE. D:.... *headscratchy* Well, if you ever get yelled at, most likely not, but you never know, just say you had my consent (even though you really didn't, but who cares o-o....). Oh man. I notice these things 5 days after it happens. Go me...--♪♫♪♫тιиα♪♫♪♫ταιқ♪♫♪ 21:40, 4 November 2009 (UTC)
NeedIcon, NeedPicture
Sometimes the category tags are left on the page when the images don't follow the policy or simply look bad. The icon in Bonita Plumed Ankle Boots for example is pretty ugly since the background wasn't cleared. --- Angevon (Talk) 18:00, 8 November 2009 (UTC)
- Oh, alright. --Jαy 18:02, 8 November 2009 (UTC)
RE: Plate Gauntlet
Thanks! Beepuke 22:08, 12 November 2009 (UTC)
RE: Big Table Knife
Yes, I read what you wrote in the comments. It seems to me like you are after getting your pic on the wiki, though, instead of keeping uniformity, or whatever you're after here. Wanna have an undo-match? Not me... but I don't understand your logic, and perhaps you'd like to enlighten me. Contributions are one thing, but fighting over pictures are another. Have your table knife page, it doesn't matter to me. The three people that visit the page can see your lavacat robe and give you kudos. You win. Have a good life. :)
Wyllow
Thank you for the bigger image =3 --ZRoc (Talk) 14:59, 30 November 2009 (UTC)
User:KaedeKit/Patches
Hi, you're using Template:Infobox on your User:KaedeKit/Patches page (in the "514_to_516.pack" section, under "NPCs") but that template is intended to automatically list the page it is used on in Category:NPCs and your sub-page is now listed there. Could you please replace it with Template:CharacterInfobox, it is meant to be used on a user's page and sub-pages instead of Template:Infobox, so this problem doesn't occur. --ZRoc (Talk) 00:13, 14 December 2009 (UTC)
Greetings
Hope you had a merry Xmas and have a great New Year =3 --ZRoc (Talk) 18:15, 29 December 2009 (UTC)
Credit to you
Hope you don't mind but I stole your links off your page a while ago and fixed them up to my liking on my page. check them out, if you like it your welcome to rip it.--Mowmooie 00:31, 31 January 2010 (UTC)
- Aw, it's okay. :) --Jαy 00:39, 31 January 2010 (UTC)
Hi Jay!
>w< I was like who's thie KaedeKit fellow, and then its YOU! >o< /waves
Heart Points
Yes i have verified that -30 characters get heart points, that's when they lose their begginer chat and the remainder heart points they have left, i had a lvl 29 and lvled him to 30, lost both begginer service and heart points, and im sorry for have erasing that other person's edit.
Wiki Tips for New Editors
Heya! Your Useful Links section is very useful! May I copy-paste it into Wiki Tips? -- ladywinter ~{talk page}~ 01:18, 15 April 2010 (UTC)
- thank you! -- ladywinter ~{talk page}~ 01:32, 15 April 2010 (UTC)
Monster Tables, your opinion?
[[User:Ladywinter/sandbox|I'm trying out several possible new templates for the normal monsters.]]
They are based on the Shadow mission monsters template.
Since you seem to be in touch with more of the mabi community than I am, can you ask around to get opinions? Both on the new template and on whether the sections should be opened or closed? -- ladywinter ~{talk page}~ 14:15, 24 April 2010 (UTC)
asking your opinion
hi there, i've noticed that over the past couple months the wiki has been getting alot of vandals. I was thinking maybe we should try and find method to present to the mods about how to limit this a bit.
On previous sites i've been on they've restricted account creation, only allowing registrations during certain periods, or implemented time limitations for edits. (I.E. Can't edit pages for 1 week after account creation).
I'd like to know your thoughts on the matter. Miyani 02:35, 9 May 2010 (UTC)
- for what it's worth, concur, with all of the above. -- ladywinter ~{talk page}~ 04:02, 9 May 2010 (UTC)
- I'm not sure how something like that would work. Maybe not being able to edit pages for a week, or a couple of days, could work. --Jay 04:07, 9 May 2010 (UTC)
Crystall Ball Image
Uh, why did you replace the Crystal Ball image? It is a in-game screen shot, I specifically removed the background because the NPC is used at multiple locations. Can you take screenshots for all the locations please? --Hengsheng120·TALKCONTRIBS 00:33, 24 May 2010 (UTC)
- I thought it was specifically Rano's since that's the only page that links to it. You can revert it if you want. --Jay 01:27, 24 May 2010 (UTC)
Magic damage
Several people complained that magic damage is variable and based entirely off the skill used, which is represented under the skills section. Also there's frequently more than one magic skill, so a magic damage number isn't very representative. It got removed. -- ladywinter ~{talk | contribs}~ 01:05, 2 June 2010 (UTC)
Windmill Train Potion
Is this really real? Is DevCat turning this into a cash shop game now? What is the image and details about it, please. --Miyuna 19:38, 7 June 2010 (UTC)
When you create new pages...
Can you use the templates:
- Template:Weaponbox for equips. It supports all types of weapons (Example at Dagger
- Template:StyleFood for any food, edible or not. (Example at Steamed Rice and Berry)
- Template:StyleItemEtc For misc items. (Example at Moon Stone Piece)
~kotarou3 TALKCONTRIBS 05:07, 4 July 2010 (UTC)
- Yes, I did. Images will not show up if I use the item template, that's why I put it in the comments on the page. Also, why did you even make it? We don't need templates for everything; I find it annoying. --Jay 03:08, 7 July 2010 (UTC)
The template loads icons... The icon is [Name].png or [Name].[Ext]
Also, It the template makes the source easier to read and formatting can be easily controlled by an edit of the template. When you wasn't using the template, you kept on using the "bgcolor" parameter and the "font" tag when the HTML 4.01 specs say that they are deprecated (Proof) ~kotarou3 TALKCONTRIBS 03:10, 7 July 2010 (UTC)
- It wasn't working earlier in the way that images wouldn't show up, nor would they link to the page. Might I also ask why you made the template? It's unnecessary to me. --Jay 03:13, 7 July 2010 (UTC)
- That doesn't mean it needs a template. Just tell me and I can just fix the code. I can code HTML and CSS fairly well.
Really, I could have saved you a lot of time. -_- --Jay 03:35, 7 July 2010 (UTC)
Also, uh...isn't Template:StyleFood the same exact thing as Template:MetaDataFood? --Jay 04:06, 7 July 2010 (UTC)
- Yes, but readability and the way we can change all misc item formatting all at once as thru the template. Also, templates don't talke long to make ~kotarou3 TALKCONTRIBS 04:29, 7 July 2010 (UTC)
Test Weapon and Item
Rather than puting Nerys and the drop list for test weapons and item (like Trinity Weapon, Dragon Tooth, Glory Sword, new cylinder, etc), why don't we just put "TEST SERVER" for it? Because in test server, Nerys sell all the new stuff (when g9 came out, she sold cylinder). So like Trinity Staff, we should just put TEST SERVER rather then puting Nerys and Fiodh Advance. What do you think? Fallenone 23:33, 16 July 2010 (UTC)
- Yeah, that seems like it would work a lot better. --kaede-kit 23:42, 16 July 2010 (UTC)
KR Test Music
Can you give me a link to where you can download the KR test server music? ~kotarou3 TALKCONTRIBS 04:14, 25 July 2010 (UTC)
- Are you able to put all the G12 and G13 music into one archive and upload it to mediafire or somewhere? ~kotarou3 TALKCONTRIBS 04:56, 25 July 2010 (UTC)
KR regular files might gave more information
they seem to be ahead of the test server somehow.--Hengsheng120·TALKCONTRIBS 07:26, 29 July 2010 (UTC)
Skills...
Uhh, You don't have to change to the template Skills3R. I was just editing it so it looked better and used less disk space ~kotarou3 TALKCONTRIBS 05:16, 22 August 2010 (UTC)
- I changed it because everything was smashed together. It was impossible to read before. --kaede-kit 05:18, 22 August 2010 (UTC)
Chinese Dragon Armor is Light Armor
<Mabi_Item ID="14039" DB_StoreType="1" Category="/equip/armor/lightarmor/leather/smith_repairable/" Text_Name0="China Dragon Armor" Generation="0" Season="0" SubSeason="0" Text_Name1="_LT[xml.itemdb.13298]" Text_Desc1="_LT[xml.itemdb.13305]" Bundle_Type="0" Bundle_Max="0" Price_Buy="710000" Attr_ActionFlag="0" Attr_Type="0" Attr_Grade="0" Attr_RaceFilter="/human/" File_MaleMesh="male_chinaarmor01_bsm" File_FemaleMesh="female_chinaarmor01_bsm" File_FieldMesh="uni_chinaarmor01_ib" File_InvImage="UU_wear_chinaarmor01" Inv_XSize="2" Inv_YSize="4" App_WeaponActionType="0" App_WearType="sm" App_UseC4Layer="TRUE" App_Color1="5" App_Color2="2" App_Color3="1" App_ColorOrder="12" App_SittingType="2" Taste_Beauty="0" Taste_Indivisuality="0" Taste_Luxury="0" Taste_Toughness="0" Taste_Utility="0" Taste_Rarity="0" Taste_Meaning="0" Taste_Adult="0" Taste_Maniac="0" Taste_Anime="0" Taste_Sexy="0" Par_BlockUseFlag="True" Par_UpgradeMax="5" Par_DurabilityMax="20000" Par_Defense="6" Par_ProtectRate="2" Par_AttackMin="0" Par_AttackMax="0" Par_WAttackMin="0" Par_WAttackMax="0" Par_CriticalRate="0" Par_AttackBalance="0" Par_EffectiveRange="0" Par_AttackSpeed="0" Par_DownHitCount="0" Food_BlockUseFlag="False" />--Hengsheng120·TALKCONTRIBS 10:24, 26 August 2010 (UTC)
Could you give me the latest /data/local/xml/ai_local.korean.txt
It might be named something else but it just has to start with ai_local ~kotarou3 TALKCONTRIBS 04:37, 8 September 2010 (UTC)
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NA Names | 0 | 16:46, 19 May 2013 |
2 | 20:03, 1 April 2013 | |
Dual Guns | 2 | 21:29, 7 March 2013 |
Thunderstroak Oak Staff | 1 | 00:36, 22 February 2013 |
Patches | 1 | 11:07, 4 February 2013 |
Scathach Caverns | 5 | 21:29, 6 January 2013 |
Let's work together | 9 | 00:47, 8 December 2012 |
New List Template | 0 | 14:30, 17 June 2012 |
Respite | 1 | 15:56, 8 May 2012 |
I thought I'd drop by and say hi... | 0 | 16:07, 28 December 2011 |
Leather Long Bow | 4 | 00:01, 28 December 2011 |
New Uladh Map | 1 | 18:20, 14 December 2011 |
Fullmetal Alchemist Items | 4 | 22:38, 22 November 2011 |
Gaaah! | 2 | 22:02, 29 October 2011 |
Thanks | 1 | 16:33, 11 September 2011 |
Paris's Costume | 3 | 11:56, 10 September 2011 |
FutureContent | 1 | 14:56, 4 September 2011 |
Daily Effects on NPCs | 1 | 09:32, 3 September 2011 |
G1 Edits | 0 | 19:07, 8 August 2011 |
Patches | 1 | 09:40, 30 July 2011 |
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I think you're reading it the other way around o.o
It seems to have been translated from
- "Quesar" to "Cessair"
- "Akul" to "Akule"
o-o
I recall there being a heruin engineering kit that repairs guns, but do you know if any NPCs make engineering repairs?
Can you actually use adv magic and charge int magic with thunderstroak staff? Otherwise it belongs in gathering tools, not staves list, since it's primary use is for the ecology skill.
You seem to have added the new life skills to G18E1 even though they did not come out then. G18 is divided into ten different patches, each having different things in them (if not just the mainstream update). Those life skills weren't even added to the test server until at least after Episode 5 was released on the official server, so they're either in the 6th update or later.
So it was you who gave it that name. Where'd you get it from? The minimap and in-game entry calls it "Witch's Cave".
No, that's in G17, that doesn't count.
I probably got it from one of the files when NA started translating everything. I don't actually remember now. :x
seeing as we are both doing the shape shifting table how about we work together and merge the good parts of your table and the good parts of my table and create something we both agree on :)
Rank, Capture Count/Count, stats and I think all the entries for the monsters that I haven't added/didn't know how to translate from your table. From mine-monsters it applies to. I don't think we need to add in the descriptions yet, even if they're in another language-just notes.
Ok I'll see what I can in terms of adding a "Applies to" column and yeah the descriptions are just their for people that want to google translate I was gonna change it when the official NA descriptions got localized.
Also we appear to both be using different icons whose shall we keep?
Ok I've updated the table to now include an "Applies To" column also the icons i've used are meant to look like whats in game too, since you've already uploaded more images we might as well use yours
I've also changed a file name name convention so it utilities your images(some won't show up since we havn't used same names)
Lastly I've already taken screenshot of all the monsters and cropped them out if you want you you can use them it might save you some time it's a fairly labor intense task...
...and convey a message from saiyr. "<saiyr> kaedekit should come back to irc"
- D
Just so you know, incorrect image uploaded for LLB inventory image. I don't know how to revert it, so this is the best I can do, just letting you know.
I understand deleting articles on items that aren't used in any server or items that are confirmed to never come to NA, but they never said anything about Fullmetal Alchemist not coming to NA. Not necessarily saying it is, but nobody said it isn't. (I don't think we should go through the files and delete 90% of the future content items.)
IIRC Nexon did mention in one of the Q&As that they couldn't implement them due to copyright or something like that.
But they also said they are still trying on multiple occasions. It's also moreso likely now that KR Nexon got rights to it.
Also, the other items I'm marking for deletion haven't been implemented at all, and the pages have existed for over a year. That's not the first time I've done it.
As I said, I understand deleting items that aren't used on any server (gardening pass, etc). I just don't think we should be removing pages for items that still have a chance of coming out. Some items from Korean Alpha Testing came out in NA in one of the recent Iria Exploration Events.
Thanks for undoing that vandalism edit. She and her husband are kinda on a rampage cause she had gotten her userpage deleted. :l But, eh. Not my fault the policy isn't being read.
Anyways, thanks again. I probably would've never noticed the edit.
We don't normally make pages for NPC only equipment. :C
If we do make a page for Paris's Costume, I'd like to point out that it did not have an inventory icon for the NPC version. Edit: Oh, never mind, I didn't know you already made it... Maybe we should put a note in there somewhere that it doesn't have one?
I anchored the days of the week on Time, so if your going to change the link on the NPCs tables, leave the day of the week after the #, but change Daily Effects to time. I can do it later on if you want.
Thanks for helping out! ^^
There's a coupla (three) changes I wanna debate, though, if you don't mind me doing so. The first is the change in "Mores are discriminating the humans" to "Mores does not like humans", I put the former there because it's a race issue he has, so I think that qualifies as discrimination. And "does not like" seems a bit tame...I'd suggest "despise" at the least. The second is the change from "urgently asks you to hurry, and gives you the Pendant of the Goddess" to "urgently asking you to hurry, and gives you the Pendant of the Goddess". From what I learned in Writer's Craft, parallelism is important, as in the words should have the same format in writing (e.g. leaving, going or left, gone, not a mixture, except in special cases. I think we should either leave that as "urgently asks you to hurry, and gives you the Pendant of the Goddess" or change it to "urgently asking you to hurry, and giving you the Pendant of the Goddess"The last is a more general-encompassing thing. I know my little habit to start with "And" and "Which" are sentence fragments and therefore improper, but I think writing them that way puts in a lot more impact to whatever the fragment is saying, which was what I aimed for when trying to write something in story format.
But really, thanks a million for the editing work!
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